Thursday 14 July 2011

Horror

I was horrified. I saw he still had a gun in his hand I told him he had to put it down right there and then but he shot at me and I sunk to the ground and the next thing I knew someone was holding me down. I felt him stab me with a needle the feeling of being piercing erupted through my body as I fell asleep I remember thinking how could I let this happen? What is he going to do to me? How could he do this to me?

The next thing I knew I woke up tied to a chair in this dark, damp smelling room I could see a window but not out of the window I thought I was going to die, there were needles all over the floor what can I do? I thought Jack as asleep on the other side of the room he had all my stuff laid out in front of me. I felt something under my foot I moved my foot as much as I could over it, it felt the buttons and the lines and there was a dial thing on the side then I worked out it was my tracker, but I hadn’t used it before will it make a sound if I press something? What do I do? I decided either way if I was going to die I wanted someone to know where I was. I just stamped and stamped on I could see a little red light ultimate the room, I quickly stood on it to hide the light.

I could feel the rough rope around my ankle slipping I wiggled my foot till it eventually feel off I managed to use my foot to un do my other foot, then I put both my feet on the chair to make a ball with my body and stood up and to my surprize the rope came off I got the cloth out my mouth. My next task was to find my gun, I was it placed under a box I walked over to the box and as I lifted the box I heard a shot jack had taken a shot at me missing me by millimetres it went straight through the box. I got my gun pulled the loader took a shot which got him in the foot he sunk and started bleeding like tea bag in water. I quickly picked up my radio from this puddle I pressed the soggy button requested back up.

I was walking back over to jack when he took another shot but this time he got me in my stomach it felt like someone had just shot me, it felt like someone wanted me dead and had stabbed me so hard and was twisting it and pulling it through my body, I started to feel white like when you’re driving and you don’t see the dip in the road I started to feel sleepy.

The next thing I heard was the door fly open and crash off the wall, standing there with a gun was the rookie who I meet at the crime scene earlier that day. I heard him run over I couldn’t keep my eyes open anymore I felt him shaking me telling me he order me to open my eyes. He put me down and ran over to jack I heard jack groan and him being dragged along the floor then I heard the handcuff being latched onto a railing and then around jacks wrist. The rookie came straight back to me I felt him shaking me and kept calling for backup on my radio, then all of a sudden I felt an immense pressure on my abdomen he was trying to stop the bleeding. I just remember feeling wet and soggy and the stench of rotting garbage and blood that filled the room all I could hear was the rookie screaming at me to wake up and to wake up right now! I feel asleep. I was thinking in my head how nice and kind this rookie was and if he was older or I was younger I would ask him out, it was at this moment I feel in love with the un-named rookie.

I woke up in the hospital the rookie was sitting there in the chair next to my bed the nurse said he hadn’t left all day. When the nurse had gone the rookie sprung up like a Meerkat and said ‘’can I ask you a question?’’ I was thinking what could he possible want to know? Why I was with jack in that place? How I knew jack? Who jack was? I just said ‘’sure what?’’ he looked like he didn’t know how to say what he wanted to say, I was right as the next thing out his mouth as ‘’I really don’t know how you will take this but you said you loved me, do you?’’

17 comments:

  1. Not sure how you managed to get from serious scary danger to a bit of romance in one episode - but you did it. Well done! And another cliffhanger ending, so we all come back next time, too. Nice work! :)

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  2. me neitier! lol and thanks!

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  3. The title is so well chosen - this is horrifying! I had to catch my breath more than once. Brava!
    Oh, and the last line was very sweet:)

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  4. thankyou! glad you liked it there's more to come...

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  5. The last line was sweet! Completely different from the rest of the story, but somehow it works.

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  6. thanks glad you like it! i didn't know what direction it was going in when i wrote it then it wrote it's self so thank the story for that! lol

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  7. Nice...thriller and romance in the same story. I like where this is going. Can't wait to see what happens next!

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  8. hehe glad you liked it! hope you like the rest of them too!

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  9. Another cliffhanger ending with just a touch of romance in the air! :O)

    I liked this line "started bleeding like tea bag in water."

    helen-scribbles.com

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  10. Thanks and that's was partly futurenostalgic glad you liked it!

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  11. I liked how the story started with something bad and ended with something good.

    I think the rookie and the main character will make a great couple. They can always remember that day as something that brought them together.

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  12. What's the rookie called?!

    Lots of action in this one, but I love the way she still manages to keep thinking ahead!

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  13. Craig- thanks i think i might use that i a part in the future.
    Icy- i know he needs a name but naming him is hard as he is now a main character and thanks.

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  14. Another great twist. The blooming romance adds a nice touch to the story. I can't wait to find out more about Jack, though.

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  15. thanks glad you liked it. Jack appears in the next few.

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  16. Wow, that had some twists and turns I was not expecting at all. You describe emotions real well. I enjoyed it.

    Thank you!
    Kwee
    Kwee Writings

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  17. thanks very much for stopping by glad you liked it!

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